Fine Line

There’s a fine line between sexy and makes you giggle. If you write erotica, be careful of it! Once your reader is laughing when she’s supposed to be getting excited, the whole thing is off.

The easiest way to cross the line is to be too florid in your descriptions. If your heroine flushes with pleasure, that’s one thing. If the florid blood that surges in her desperate heart suddenly whooshes to the velvety surface of her skin, that’s another.

Another way to cross the line into unintentionally funny is to have independently moving body parts. The most typically quoted example is: his eyes traveled down her body and went back up to her face. Ew! Her eyes rolled, his hand moved across the room to grab the drink, etc etc.

Another way is to have confusing logistics. If your hero has one hand on her buttocks, another wound in her hair, and then somehow brushes a curl out of her eyes, your reader is going to start counting hands.

There are lots of other ways, but these are some of the obvious ones! Good luck in avoiding these pitfalls!

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2 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. xiamcorl
    Oct 14, 2008 @ 15:27:37

    I try to watch how many hands I have going at once. It comes from all the cybersex I used to have in a game I played years ago. It was a big turn off when my partner had 5 or 6 hands and or 2 to 3 tongues. I was very careful to make my hands and other parts move from place to place which I think is part of the reason I was popular in the group I was in.

    Croaker

  2. asherose
    Oct 15, 2008 @ 07:17:28

    Hmmm… turnoff if done by accident maybe. If on purpose… well!

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